depression

[Andrew_Marriott]

Here's another one of mine.
The spelliong mistakes are deliberate.
Work is continuing on a second verse.
let me know (andrew.marriott@scotland.com) if you want to find more stuff I've done.


Ctrl+Alt+Delete

Just cos no-one's watching
Doesn't mean rules don't apply
They aren't there to spoil your fun
They're there for your own good
And one small slip can snowball
And send your world a tumbling
Till you can't tell what's day or night
And later there's no rong or write
You just wish someone
Would Control Alt Delete your life
And start again


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Eh, Whit ?

[alpin]

Good surface poem, strong ending.

I believe the storm here is darker than you would have it appear... kick up some dirt. And then claim, "the author of the poem is not always the narrator!"

(My spelling mistakes are not deliberate, that's what editors are for. heehee)

[Andrew_Marriott]

actually, the next verse is going to be lighter, cheerier, sort of "the light at the end of the tunnel" type "darkest hour is before the dawn" idea

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Eh, Whit ?

[Kim]

Andrew..

that was great..I can sympathize..with the flavor of depression...it leaves a bad taste in your mouth you remember always even after you reach the light...your minds eye sees back to when...

Kim